Quickly weaving between the other cars, Turn on the stereo and let the tunes fly. Warm sunshine cascades through the sunroof. The cars in front suddenly slam on their brakes, Crash.
Seems like another day in Greenville lol. I thought it was really nice, considering how small the piece was, that you were able to capture the images so visually.
I really like the natural feel of this poem. It's as if you took your everyday experience of driving and wrote it down. I also like how relevant this poem is because anyone and everyone can relate, in some way or another, to having a car crash
I feel this poem painted a very strong, clear image. It started off with no tension and quickly escalated to a vivid flash of energy. I do wish there was more build up to the crash though. It would be really cool if you expanded the poem into a longer narrative that followed the same line and elevated the drama in the storyline.
I thought you did a good job painting the scene using as little detail as possible. I could easily imaging this scenario. Good job.
ReplyDeleteAs short as it is, this piece does leave quite an impact. You did a good job of changing the mood of the poem so quickly.
ReplyDeleteSeems like another day in Greenville lol. I thought it was really nice, considering how small the piece was, that you were able to capture the images so visually.
ReplyDeleteI really like the natural feel of this poem. It's as if you took your everyday experience of driving and wrote it down. I also like how relevant this poem is because anyone and everyone can relate, in some way or another, to having a car crash
ReplyDeleteI feel this poem painted a very strong, clear image. It started off with no tension and quickly escalated to a vivid flash of energy. I do wish there was more build up to the crash though. It would be really cool if you expanded the poem into a longer narrative that followed the same line and elevated the drama in the storyline.
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